ECookie on DeviantArthttps://www.deviantart.com/ecookie/art/SML-OC-Zuri-Profile-431154221ECookie

Deviation Actions

ECookie's avatar

SML.OC ~ Zuri (Profile)

By
Published:
786 Views

Description

Name: Zuri (ザズーリ)

Age: 12

Birthday: 4th January (Capricorn)

Family: (Older Brother) Jeff (2nd Oldest Brother) Zero (Sister in law) Sarasa (Nephew) Jean (Grandmother) Jenny (Step Brother in law) Ichi

Magic: Fire Destruction

Story: Zuri the third child added to the family, just a year younger than her middle brother Zero. strangely having her next brothers hair colour and eyes, as she grew up she was close to her brother, since her family was busy while her oldest was working. As she always stayed with her brother during his training and always watches him and always want to obtain the power which he has.

When she turned 5 as her brother was 6, he took her out and teaches, her secret magic, it was exactly the same as his but Zuri added a twist, its Fire Destruction but she couldn't control till she was 10. During her life until the age of 10 she went in a fight with a group of boys and nearly using this 'power' she nearly knock them out cold.

Then when her oldest brother got married (Jeff) to Sarasa, she introduced the two Zero and herself to her step-brother Ichi, it was a quiet at first but then the two, Ichi and herself became great friends and also with Zero, when the three were out, they got into trouble by this group of boys that were for Ichi, he shouted for the two to go away and let him fight.

With Zero and Zuri saw him struggling they never did something strong before, combined two Destruction Magic together. After there performance with double of the strength, they both blew all the guys down, but as Zuri never knew how to control it, the power token over her body and controlled her, crying about the pain inside, Ichi ran over and used his defensive magic and made her calm down and it left her go limp and weak for a few days.

After when Zero turned 13 he entered the Magic Exam with their brother-in-law, of course was happy for her brother to be achieving his dream but more sad since he and Ichi wouldn't be around anymore to play with.

When Zero left Zuri was 6 her family was invited to a party hosted by the Sherard Family, and it was posh party, but with no brother to have fun with because at the time he was sick so Ichi took care for him which left her by herself, she was pretty alone with no fun. As she was walking around as her mother was talking to the head of the household, she heard music, a flute being played which caught her attention and followed it. She arrived and saw a boy, looking around her age with blonde hair playing the flute, what looked like was practising his 'Magic' on a chicken and making it fly.

Zuri slowed down but as she was walking she stepped on a twig with caught the boys attention, Zuri gasp in shocked that he had seen her but the chicken started to fall, then the boy put the chicken safety onto the ground. Then he turned to face Zuri but she ran off and he went looking her this 'girl' 

After a while he finds her and after a while they introduced themselves, this boy was Forte Sherard, he was 7 years old and his magic was Hypnotic, with his flute, and after there first meeting they became best friends, even if they lived far, one of them visits the other house like 1 or 3 times a week.

Then in school he announced that he was taking the exam with his cousin Sun, she wished him luck and the very best and did the same for her brother who was paired with her brother-in-law.

As Zuri turned 13 she visited her brother and brother-in-law in the human world and then meets with a girl called Nina and she hangs around in their class pretending to be 14

But in a fight... Would she go against her brother and brother-in-law.... or the boy she loves the most?

-------

Wow a LONG story on my Mamotte OC Zuri

Please read this story of her and I hope you all like her.

Nina, Zero, Ichi, Sun, Jeff, Sarasa (C) Mammotte Lollipop *Not me*

Zuri (C) ME do not steal


Image size
732x1164px 2.42 MB
© 2014 - 2024 ECookie
Comments2
Join the community to add your comment. Already a deviant? Log In
2perfect's avatar
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

Let me start off with your anatomy.
I assume she's a girl, and there's no shading where the breasts are, just a black line. Her shirt should stretch a bit there. Not only that, the head/hair is too flat. Her head/hair is way too flat, and try to add more "BAM" to it, such as sparkles and more colors!

Now for the shading, the hair is too bland, as well as where the hair is, her skin wouldn't look like that. Just slightly and it wouldn't shape exactly like the hair. It'd shape around slightly (try shading it in)

For the clothes, the breasts, does she have any? There isn't really anything. The clothes are too flat, especially the clothes. The bow wouldn't stick out like that, it'd droop more and holy big bow!

Anatomy, nobody stands in that position. Her legs should have some space as well as her feet. Shade some lines where the knees are!